MOTIVATION LETTER Sample

[TraiTaoXanh]

Có progress để viết rùi nhưng coi bộ để write một cái motivation letter vẫn còn nhìu khó khăn lắm hen?! :-/ ;-) Táo sẽ post một số sample lên đây nhé! Để các bạn khỏi mất công search thui à! Nhưng nên nhớ, TUYỆT ĐỐI KHÔNG COPY LẠI để send thẳng cho các trường đâu nha! Vì admission officers là những người cực kỳ chăm đọc đấy! Chỉ nên sử dụng các phrases và xem với mục đích tham khảo structure để viết motivation letter cho bạn thân mình một cách tốt nhất thui! Okie chứ?

Sample 1
Dentistry Sample

This sample personal statement is a vivid, concise and readability and originality will certainly gain the appreciation of an admissions officer.

I am fascinated with dentistry because I love to network and build computers.
If I spoke these words aloud, many people would scratch their heads and appear confused. At first glance, this statement appears absurd. On a closer look, however, it makes perfect sense.

When I work on computers, I must operate within a tiny space inside a computer cache, taking extreme care to avoid damaging the delicate equipment. As a dentist, I will also perform my duties within the smallest of spaces, using tiny instruments on fragile surfaces.

Of course, there is a crucial distinction between building a computer and providing dental care. While both fields allow me to employ my manual skills, only one has the significant interpersonal component that I seek in a career. While I am grateful to the computer technician who corrects glitches in my operating system, I have far more gratitude to the orthodontist who straightened my teeth as a child.

To glimpse the daily duties of a dentist, I spent this summer actively acquiring work experience in several branches of dentistry. For one month, I shadowed two dentists in general practice, both offering NHS and private treatment. I learnt to make dentures by working with my orthodontist for two weeks and spent several days observing activity at Orpington's Oral and Maxillofacial department. I also attended dental lectures in a Medisix course held at Nottingham University.

These experiences further convinced me that dentistry is the profession that correctly combines my mechanical aptitude with my desire for interpersonal interaction. Observing each dentist, I concluded that a common thread of skills united them all, regardless of their speciality: each dentist worked well on a team, exercised strong leadership skills and possessed the ability to communicate clearly and precisely.

Through my volunteer activities, I have learned to connect with people from a variety of ages and social backgrounds. Volunteering at a primary school, I used a soothing tone and simple vocabulary to put children at ease. While working at a home for disabled adul*** I learned to gauge the emotional state of each resident and tailor my conversational style and content appropriately. For example, I discovered that thorough explanations often quelled the anxiety of those who appeared nervous about a medical or personal situation.

Having attained three gold certificates in the National Mathematics Challenge, I have the academic mettle to handle this demanding course. I also possess the flexible mind required to adapt to new advances in the field. Whether earning a bronze medal in a national competition as a brown belt in karate or playing cricket for my sports team, I have readily embraced and excelled at new challenges.

Discussions with undergraduate dental students have only reinforced my decision to pursue dentistry. I embrace the opportunity to put my communication, academic and mechanical skills to use as I work to maintain the oral health of my patients.
(Sample from GetIntoUni - UK)

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Sample 2
Doctor Sample

This personal statement does an excellent job of presenting a unique candidate who has experienced a lengthy and enriching personal growth process.

After working over one hundred hours a week for more than three months, I completed the project to great success. I had worked hard on this difficult assignment; on the surface, my job was going well. With an MA in Management and a covenant position with a Big Four accounting firm, I had impressive credentials. I had also gained substantial experience working with information systems and performing financial audits and reconciliations.

Why, then, was I not satisfied?

Upon entering my career, I had assumed that professional and financial success would surely bring personal fulfilment. After some time, however, I became frustrated because I did not enjoy my work. I decided to interview for similar positions. During this process, however, reality hit me: changing companies would not solve my problem because the entire career field did not meet my needs.

This realization triggered a process of self-searching that led me to medicine. This decision did not come quickly or easily. After all, the commitment to provide others with healthcare is a serious decision for anyone, particularly someone with an established career. As I examined my interests and goals, however, I underwent a process of personal growth that has propelled me towards a career as a physician.

Upon examining my job responsibilities, I realised that I enjoyed the problem-solving duties of my corporate career much more than the specific subject matter. I had always worked hard to understand and communicate my company's line of business. Furthermore, my detailed programming and financial analysis had identified many profitable opportunities for the company amidst a constantly changing, complicated economy.

Not only did my preferred career emphasise problem solving, but it also allowed me to work closely with others in a caretaking role. When I examined my past, I observed a pattern of volunteer work and leadership.

Of course, many careers would allow me to solve problems and benefit others. A career in medicine will allow me to integrate thoroughly my passion for science into a public-service framework. Since childhood, I have loved acquiring scientific knowledge, particularly involving biological processes. I also have a keen interest in health care policy and public health; while serving as a physician, I plan to pursue additional roles in these fields.

My colleagues at work have commented on my idealism. While many motivate themselves with thoughts of maintaining a high salary or proving their worth through achievemen*** I have sought to shed those goals in favour of providing tangible health benefits to others. I have already had more fun than I deserve; I seek the long-term intellectual challenge and interpersonal rewards that accompany work in the medical field.

In making this career transition, I must show evidence of the prolonged commitment, intellectual maturity, and altruism required to excel in medical school and as a physician. During my undergraduate studies, I displayed my ability to juggle competing demands while still maintaining my academic focus; I have succeeded at school while volunteering part time, spending time with family and friends, and working part-time. To better serve my expected patient population, I plan to take some refresher Spanish classes while in medical school.

I have come to discover that a job and even a good income, absent another significant purpose, will not bring satisfaction. I plan to utilize my asse*** namely my problem- solving affinity, strong work ethic, and interpersonal commitment, to craft a stimulating, personally rewarding career in medicine. Fortunately, I have an opportunity to make a change, and I could not be more grateful. I have taken stock of myself, considering my skills, experiences, and goals. I have looked to family and friends, some of whom are doctors, for advice. Because of this self-examination, I have decided to pursue a career in healthcare.

The process has been difficult at times but always illuminating. Throughout it all, I have never lost confidence-the confidence that I will actively absorb all available medical knowledge, forge friendships with fellow studen*** and emerge from my training as a skilful and caring physician

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Sample 3
Science - Edited Essay

(Sample này đã được UK Editors edit rùi nha! Tuy là edited essay nhưng nó chưa chắc đã là best sample đâu! Nó chỉ better than bản thân nó lúc chưa được edit thui à! ;)) )

After completing my A-level studies, I wanted serious exposure to hands-on science.
For that reason, when a pharmaceutical company offered me a position, I jumped at the opportunity. For one year, I worked closely with a number of scientists as they researched existing diseases and conducted countless experiments to test the efficacy of new drugs.

I knew then that I wanted to devote my studies to learning how body mechanisms react to varying chemicals. Witnessing innovative pharmaceutical research had only intensified my passion for biochemistry, a subject I had become fascinated with in high school; it had intrigued me because it integrated my love of chemistry with my desire to learn more about biological processes.

My A-level studies provided me with a solid introduction to biochemistry; I now seek a greater academic focus and more extensive research opportunities by pursuing a university degree.

Throughout high school, my extracurricular activities sharpened skills I will need in my biochemistry course-even if the activities often involved dance and music rather than science. Each week, I spent the majority of my spare time participating in {List school-related music and dance activities}. I also participated in my local parish's band and was elected Band Leader by the other members. Serving in this leadership position has allowed me to shape a community music program and taught me just how much I have learned about time-management and commitment. My busy schedule has required me to carefully divide my time among my academics, extracurricular interes*** family and friends; throughout it all, I have prioritised my academics while remaining firmly committed to my outside pursuits. During my biochemistry studies, this balancing act will prove extremely useful as I seriously dedicate myself to my academics while also maintaining time for my hobbies and relationships.

Five years ago, I had the opportunity to visit Birmingham, England-and I loved every minute of it. The people, the culture and the location all sparked my interest in one day living in England. I have also visited Japan; these experiences have made me realise that travelling is one of my great passions. No matter where I study, I will pursue a rigorous scientific course. However, I want to immerse myself in a cross-cultural experience in a place that fascinates me. Based on my research and previous travel experiences, I know that England is this place.

(Sample from GetIntoUni Editors)

[Rarhy]

Cái gì thế này? Em mà hiểu em chết liền. Cái này có liên quan đến Du học à? Sao em chẳng hiểu gì nhỉ? >< Có gì các anh chị dạy bảo nhé .. Em thích đi du học lắm ... Rất mún quen ai làm kiến trúc bên Pháp ><

[TraiTaoXanh]

Originally posted by Rarhy@Sep 26 2005, 11:05 PM
Cái gì thế này? Em mà hiểu em chết liền. Cái này có liên quan đến Du học à? Sao em chẳng hiểu gì nhỉ? >< Có gì các anh chị dạy bảo nhé .. Em thích đi du học lắm ... Rất mún quen ai làm kiến trúc bên Pháp ><
Thư nguyện vọng để xin du học em ạ&#33; Em muốn học trường nào bên nước ngoài đều phải viết thư nguyện vọng sang&#33; Đây là những sample. Nhưng mà = English&#33; :-?

[Rarhy]

Thế ạ? Thế em chỉ cần viết mấy thứ này là được đi du học à >< Kaka ... >< Có ai học ở Pháp không chỉ em mấy thứ về Pháp đi :)

[TraiTaoXanh]

Originally posted by Rarhy@Sep 26 2005, 11:32 PM
Thế ạ? Thế em chỉ cần viết mấy thứ này là được đi du học à >< Kaka ... >< Có ai học ở Pháp không chỉ em mấy thứ về Pháp đi :)
Quan trọng nhất vẫn là có money&#33; Cái này chỉ giúp em được những trường tốt accept thui&#33; ;) Have fun&#33;

[Rarhy]

Oạch&#33; Thế nói làm gì... Em phải thi được 75% thì ông bà già mới cho đi cơ... Híc híc híc ... còn phải học nhiều :">

[nụ hôn SARS]

Chị TraiTaoXanh đang học trường nào bên UK vậy, cho em được thỉnh giáo... Iem học MPW (Mander Portman Woodward), năm nay A2, đang có nguyện vọng vào LSE và đang phải viết PS, chị có cái nào thực sự hay ko? Mấy cái trên em thấy có vẻ classic quá.

[TraiTaoXanh]

Originally posted by nụ hôn SARS@Sep 27 2005, 09:18 AM
Chị TraiTaoXanh đang học trường nào bên UK vậy, cho em được thỉnh giáo... Iem học MPW (Mander Portman Woodward), năm nay A2, đang có nguyện vọng vào LSE và đang phải viết PS, chị có cái nào thực sự hay ko? Mấy cái trên em thấy có vẻ classic quá.
Chị đang học ở VN thui&#33; Nhưng vừa rùi chị phải viết PS nên có chút xíu tài liệu, post lên share với mọi người&#33; Năm tới chị mới đi du học cơ&#33; B) Chị có cái PS của chị, nhưng vì là personal nên ko thể post public được&#33; Nếu em cần thì contact với chị, chị có thể send cho em qua mail. OK? But sample nào cũng để tham khảo thui em&#33; Em coi qua topic How to write a motivation letter của chị rùi tự viết coi sao&#33; OK? Good luck, dear&#33;

[Santa Slash]

I only write the letter to get the scholarship
write a letter is not difficult => it depend on your opinion in that letter
Show them all what you have (hey all of them must be true)

[TraiTaoXanh]

Originally posted by Santa Slash@Oct 6 2005, 12:33 AM
I only write the letter to get the scholarship
write a letter is not difficult => it depend on your opinion in that letter
Show them all what you have (hey all of them must be true)
Yep&#33; Idea is the most important thing&#33; But Motivation letter is a formal letter and has formal structure. Do you sure everybody know about it? Do you get scholarship with your PS? From which school?

[Santa Slash]

Yep
see my apply for mod

[TraiTaoXanh]

We are not allowed to make any mistakes in a formal letter, guy&#33; "My application", you can&#39;t use "my apply" because apply is a verb&#33;

[Santa Slash]

In a forum I dun care anything (in E) =))

[ninja lynh]

Originally posted by TraiTaoXanh@Oct 6 2005, 01:41 AM
  Do you sure everybody know about it?
Are you sure this is the kind of grammar which belongs to someone who claim themself "exchange student"? Shame. No offense but just by taking 2 min read these so called "modelized" stuff, I can easily figure out while Viet students are struggling to survive in a forein country


to santa slash: that&#39;s my man :))